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MM tries Haiku

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MM tries Haiku

Sorry to put youse thru dis

from JoeUser Forums

 

Haiku! bless you he said,

 smile,ear to ear grin,

 blows nose gently, goodbye

 

 

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Reply #26 from JoeUser Forums Top

Reply By: uDigItTheMostPosted: Wednesday, June 13, 2007
Glad joes comments brought a smile to dat mug, but being with rose you must smile alot anyways.

ModMan, I don't have to tell you what the love of a good woman does for a man. We're both lucky guys. Or as Joe will say, "Lucky fuckers".

yes no doubt about that, being in love and have that love returned is truly a gift.

Reply #27 from JoeUser Forums Top
English Haiku does not (necessarily) require the syllable count 5-7-5 as Japanese Haiku.

http://www.ahapoetry.com/keirule.htm

Poets have used an alternative form and retain the haiku spirit. What matters is that meaning is most condensed, and each line depicts a scene and the entire piece gives reader new insight or an interesting unifying perspective.
But I agree with some above, I find this piece a little cute.
Sins of a Solar Empire II
Reply #28 from JoeUser Forums Top
MM is righteous
His haiku sadly is not
We love him the same

Reply #29 from JoeUser Forums Top

Reply By: little-whipPosted: Friday, June 15, 2007
Haiku! bless you he said, (six syllables)

smile,ear to ear grin, (five)

blows nose gently, goodbye (six)

Uhmm, I hate to be the only one to tell ya this, Elie, but a Haiku either has a 5-7-5 syllable pattern or a 3-5-3. It's based on syllables rather than word count, but even if it were based on word count it doesn't 'fit.' (5-5-4?)

It's still cute, and I still loves ya.

\thanx for still loving me, notice the title. "MM TRIES Haiku"

Reply #30 from JoeUser Forums Top

Reply By: RavenblackPosted: Friday, June 15, 2007
English Haiku does not (necessarily) require the syllable count 5-7-5 as Japanese Haiku.

http://www.ahapoetry.com/keirule.htm

Poets have used an alternative form and retain the haiku spirit. What matters is that meaning is most condensed, and each line depicts a scene and the entire piece gives reader new insight or an interesting unifying perspective.
But I agree with some above, I find this piece a little cute.

Thank you raven, I gave it a shot, sometimes you shoot and miss, I shot and missed on this one, but as long as some found it to be cute and smiled , I am content.

Reply #32 from JoeUser Forums Top

Reply By: little-whipPosted: Saturday, June 16, 2007
MM is righteous
His haiku sadly is not
We love him the same

 

Reply By: MasonMPosted: Friday, June 15, 2007

MM is righteous
His haiku sadly is not
We love him the same

I feel THE LOVE INSIDE me

tingles a place no one

Can find but me, summer wind blows.

Reply #33 from JoeUser Forums Top

Reply By: ShovelheatPosted: Tuesday, June 19, 2007
See! I told you you'd get a jillion comments for this!

I am so far away from a jillion joe, it ain't funny.